Life is series of chances
to perceive and grasp boundless opportunities.
Key: to grasp.
We can't sit by
staring opportunity in the eye
justifying 'next time.'
Grasp it. Grip it. Hold it.
Love it.
There may not be a next time.
Or a next time that is as right.
Otherwise, you enable
the possibility
of settling
and hoping for the chance at another
more convenient
opportunity.
Hoping for the chance at one too many chances.
That isn't life.
That is cowardice.
to perceive and grasp boundless opportunities.
Key: to grasp.
We can't sit by
staring opportunity in the eye
justifying 'next time.'
Grasp it. Grip it. Hold it.
Love it.
There may not be a next time.
Or a next time that is as right.
Otherwise, you enable
the possibility
of settling
and hoping for the chance at another
more convenient
opportunity.
Hoping for the chance at one too many chances.
That isn't life.
That is cowardice.
This is a cool challenge.
ReplyDeleteA couple of the lines are really strong, really good. 'Key: to grasp' - that works, man. Works really well. Great enjambment from 1-2, 4-6. Each line lives on its own, but they flow so well together. Great work there.
Two questions:
Would pulling 'of settling' up one line strengthen that section? 'the possibility' and 'of settling' are both important (necessary), to the overall push, the forward motion, but don't make the sort of line that 'opportunity' or ever 'more convenient' do later on. To my eye they could be one line and you wouldn't lose meaning.
To my ear, the last two lines push a bit too far. 'Hoping for the chance at one to many chances' is a good final punch. After that, you lose your particular voice. What you're saying at the end is true, but is already said by the rest of the poem itself. Would you lose too much of the rhythm if you dropped those last two lines?