Transcendental
invisible fingers,
stretching and caressing
and infiltrating our individual mind
and controlling our societal soul.
Defining culture, shaping friendship
generating communities, simplifying relationships,
prophesying, moralizing, globalizing.
Identifying.
We are new creations
born again in technology and cyberspace.
The old has gone, the new has come.
Our culture, made in Its image:
Internet.
On one hand I like that there is an absence of solid images or sensual markers here - it's all abstract concepts. Great reduplication of form and content in some sense. At the same time, using some strong, specific visual phrases, smells or sights, some kind of reference to the material, perceivable reality of these things (metallic taste, burning smell, sheer textures, strident electric sounds) would add a little engagement for the reader - pull in a little more to the experience of interacting with technology. Would that weaken the mediation too much? Was that tension between the abstraction of the concept and the specificity of engagement on your mind at all as you composed?
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